一、作文题目
题目:某英文杂志正在开展以“The Person I Admire Most”为主题的征文活动。请你写一篇短文投稿,介绍你最敬佩的人。
二、范文全文
The Person I Admire Most
The person I admire most is my 70-year-old grandmother.
She has a strong passion for learning. Years ago, she taught herself to read, and now she reads books every day. At 68, she learned to use smartphones—now she video calls us and even plays chess apps. “Learning keeps your mind young,” she often says.
But what I admire most is her kindness. Every weekend, she cooks dumplings for lonely neighbors. She always tells me, “Sharing food is sharing love.”
My grandmother proves that age is just a number. She is curious, warm-hearted, and always willing to learn. I hope to be just like her—forever curious and forever kind.
三、逐句解析与结构分析
第一段:开篇点题
1. 原句: The person I admire most is my 70-year-old grandmother.
中文释义: 我最敬佩的人是我70岁的奶奶。
句子结构划分:
· 主语:The person
· 定语从句:(that) I admire most (省略that,修饰person)
· 谓语:is
· 表语:my 70-year-old grandmother
第二段:敬佩原因之一——热爱学习
1. 原句: She has a strong passion for learning.
中文释义: 她对学习有着强烈的热情。
句子结构划分:
· 主语:She
· 谓语:has
· 宾语:a strong passion
· 定语:for learning
2. 原句: Years ago, she taught herself to read, and now she reads books every day.
中文释义: 多年前,她自学识字,现在她每天读书。
句子结构划分:
· 这是一个由and连接的并列句
· 第一分句:Years ago, she taught herself to read
· 时间状语:Years ago;主语:she;谓语:taught;宾语:herself;宾补:to read
· 第二分句:now she reads books every day
· 时间状语:now;主语:she;谓语:reads;宾语:books;频率状语:every day
3. 原句: At 68, she learned to use smartphones—now she video calls us and even plays chess apps.
中文释义: 68岁时,她学会了使用智能手机——现在她跟我们视频通话,甚至玩象棋应用。
句子结构划分:
· 时间状语:At 68
· 主语:she
· 谓语:learned
· 宾语:to use smartphones
· 破折号后面解释说明:now she video calls us and even plays chess apps
· 主语:she;并列谓语:video calls... and plays...
· 宾语:us / chess apps
4. 原句: “Learning keeps your mind young,” she often says.
中文释义: 她常说:“学习让你的头脑保持年轻。”
句子结构划分:
· 直接引语:“Learning keeps your mind young”
· 主语:Learning;谓语:keeps;宾语:your mind;宾补:young
· 主句:she often says
第三段:敬佩原因之二——善良
1. 原句: But what I admire most is her kindness.
中文释义: 但我最敬佩的是她的善良。
句子结构划分:
· 主语从句:what I admire most
· 从句主语:I;从句谓语:admire;从句宾语:what;从句状语:most
· 谓语:is
· 表语:her kindness
2. 原句: Every weekend, she cooks dumplings for lonely neighbors.
中文释义: 每个周末,她包饺子给孤独的邻居。
句子结构划分:
· 时间状语:Every weekend
· 主语:she
· 谓语:cooks
· 宾语:dumplings
· 状语:for lonely neighbors
3. 原句: She always tells me, “Sharing food is sharing love.”
中文释义: 她总是告诉我:“分享食物就是分享爱。”
句子结构划分:
· 主语:She
· 谓语:tells
· 间接宾语:me
· 直接引语:“Sharing food is sharing love”
· 主语:Sharing food;谓语:is;表语:sharing love
第四段:总结升华
1. 原句: My grandmother proves that age is just a number.
中文释义: 我的奶奶证明了年龄只是一个数字。
句子结构划分:
· 主语:My grandmother
· 谓语:proves
· 宾语从句:that age is just a number
2. 原句: She is curious, warm-hearted, and always willing to learn.
中文释义: 她好奇、热心,并且总是愿意学习。
句子结构划分:
· 主语:She
· 谓语:is
· 并列表语:curious, warm-hearted, and always willing to learn
3. 原句: I hope to be just like her—forever curious and forever kind.
中文释义: 我希望成为像她一样的人——永远好奇,永远善良。
句子结构划分:
· 主语:I
· 谓语:hope
· 宾语:to be just like her
· 破折号后面补充说明:forever curious and forever kind
四、高分词汇与句型提炼
1. 亮点词汇/短语
· admire —— 敬佩
比 like 或 love 更正式,表达尊敬之情。
· 70-year-old —— 70岁的
带连字符的复合形容词,准确简洁。
· has a strong passion for —— 对……有强烈的热情 比 likes very much 更有力量。
· taught herself —— 自学
反身代词,强调自学能力。
· video calls —— 视频通话
现代生活词汇,体现奶奶紧跟时代。
· chess apps —— 象棋应用
具体的手机应用,细节生动。
· keeps your mind young —— 让头脑保持年轻
keep + 宾语 + 形容词结构。
· what I admire most —— 我最敬佩的是……
主语从句,引出重点。
· lonely neighbors —— 孤独的邻居
体现奶奶的关爱对象。
· proves —— 证明
比 shows 更有说服力。
· age is just a number —— 年龄只是一个数字
经典励志语句。
· curious, warm-hearted —— 好奇的,热心的
形容词准确概括人物品质。
· willing to learn —— 愿意学习
比 likes to learn 更正式。
· forever curious and forever kind —— 永远好奇,永远善良
排比结构,强化主题。
2. 高分句型
· 原句: The person I admire most is my 70-year-old grandmother.
句型名称: 定语从句 + 复合形容词
适用场景: 开篇点题。用定语从句点明关系,用复合形容词介绍人物特点。
· 原句: She has a strong passion for learning.
句型名称: have a passion for + 名词/动名词
适用场景: 表达对某事的热爱。比 like 更有深度。
· 原句: Years ago, she taught herself to read, and now she reads books every day.
句型名称: 并列句 + 时间对比
适用场景: 通过时间对比展示人物的成长和坚持。
· 原句: “Learning keeps your mind young,” she often says.
句型名称: 直接引语 + 插入语
适用场景: 引用人物原话,让人物形象更鲜活。
· 原句: But what I admire most is her kindness.
句型名称: what 引导的主语从句
适用场景: 强调重点。这个句型比 The thing I admire most is... 更简洁有力。
· 原句: My grandmother proves that age is just a number.
句型名称: prove that + 宾语从句
适用场景: 总结人物给我们的启示。
· 原句: I hope to be just like her—forever curious and forever kind.
句型名称: hope to do sth. + 破折号补充说明
适用场景: 表达愿望并具体说明。破折号后的排比结构强化情感。
五、仿写
小练习

1. 仿写原句: The person I admire most is my 70-year-old grandmother.
仿写提示: 请用定语从句和复合形容词,表达“我最敬佩的人是我45岁的英语老师”。
关键词: 45-year-old (45岁的), English teacher (英语老师)
学生仿写: _____________________
2. 仿写原句: She has a strong passion for learning.
仿写提示: 请用 have a passion for... 的句型,表达“他对音乐有着强烈的热情”。
关键词: music (音乐)
学生仿写: _____________________
3. 仿写原句: But what I admire most is her kindness.
仿写提示: 请用 what I admire most is... 的句型,表达“但我最敬佩的是他的勇气”。
关键词: courage (勇气)
学生仿写: _____________________
4. 仿写原句: I hope to be just like her—forever curious and forever kind.
仿写提示: 请用破折号补充说明,表达“我希望成为像他一样的人——永远努力,永远乐观”。
关键词: hardworking (努力的), optimistic (乐观的)
学生仿写: _____________________
参考答案:
The person I admire most is my 45-year-old English teacher.
He has a strong passion for music.
But what I admire most is his courage.
I hope to be just like him—forever hardworking and forever optimistic.