五：写作真题
假定你是湘江学院的学生肖潇，你参加了班级组织的 10 公里徒步活动，请把你的经历和感受分享给你的好友珍。词数不少于 80 词。
[范文]
Dear Jenny,
How is everything going? Recently I took part in the 10-kilometer hiking organized by my class, which was quite unforgettable.
At first, I was full of energy and enjoyed the beautiful sights along the way. But soon I felt so tired that I wanted to stop. Luckily, my classmates encouraged me all the time. With their help, I kept moving and finished the whole hike.
This activity not only built up my body but also taught me the importance of perseverance. As the saying goes, nothing is impossible if you put your heart into it. I really benefit a lot from it.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Xiao Xiao
三、高分拆解
1、先搞懂题目核心要求
- 身份：湘江学院学生肖潇
- 收信人：好友Jenny（非正式书信，语气亲切自然）
- 事件：班级10公里徒步活动
- 任务：分享经历+表达感受
- 字数：≥80词（专升本建议写100-120词，避免字数不足扣分）
2、高分书信结构拆解（4段黄金模板）
第1段：开头问候+点明主题（开门见山）
范文写法：
How is everything going? Recently I took part in the 10-kilometer hiking organized by my class, which was quite unforgettable.
✅ 高分技巧：
- 用日常问候句开头，符合书信场景，不生硬
- 一句话点明事件，用非限定性定语从句补充感受（which was quite unforgettable），句型瞬间升级
第2段：叙事部分（经历过程，有起伏更真实）
范文写法：
At first, I was full of energy and enjoyed the beautiful sights along the way. But soon I felt so tired that I wanted to stop. Luckily, my classmates encouraged me all the time. With their help, I kept moving and finished the whole hike.
✅ 高分逻辑：「先顺-再折-后转折解决」，让故事有画面感
- At first：交代活动初期状态（充满活力、欣赏风景）
- But soon：制造小冲突（累到想放弃）
- Luckily/With their help：转折+解决（同学鼓励，坚持完成）
✅ 加分句型：
- so…that… 结果状语从句（so tired that I wanted to stop）
- With one’s help 介词短语作状语（With their help, I kept moving）
第3段：感受升华（从事件到收获，拔高立意）
范文写法：
This activity not only built up my body but also taught me the importance of perseverance. As the saying goes, nothing is impossible if you put your heart into it. I really benefit a lot from it.
✅ 高分技巧：不止写“玩得开心”，还要写精神层面的收获（毅力、坚持、团队合作），符合专升本作文的正向价值观导向
✅ 加分句型：
- not only…but also… 并列连词，体现句型多样性
- As the saying goes 引用谚语，是专升本作文的“万能加分项”
- benefit a lot from… 常用短语，表“从……中获益良多”
第4段：结尾祝福+落款（格式完整）
范文写法：
Best wishes!
Yours,
Xiao Xiao
✅ 高分要点：格式必须规范，非正式书信用 Best wishes!/Yours, ，落款在右下角，不写错格式就不会丢基础分
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