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写作思路拆解

叙事描写类脚手架

一、环境描写（用于图1开头 / 图4结尾）

营造氛围、暗示时间、衬托心情

• in the dead of night 夜深人静时

• under the cover of darkness 在夜色掩护下

• a dark, quiet street 黑暗安静的街道

• the moon was hidden behind clouds 月亮躲进云里

• silence filled the room 房间里一片寂静

• only the sound of his breathing 只剩下他的呼吸声

二、动作描写（用于图1、图2、图4）

让画面动起来，有镜头感

图1·进入

• climb through the window 从窗户爬进去

• slip into the room like a shadow 像影子一样溜进房间

• land softly on the floor 轻轻落地

图2·偷窃

• open drawers one by one 一个一个打开抽屉

• grab the cash and phone 抓起现金和手机

• stuff everything into his bag 把所有东西塞进包里

• scan the room for valuables 扫视房间找值钱的东西

• hands trembling slightly 手微微发抖

图4·被抓

• the police rushed in 警察冲进来

• catch him red-handed 当场抓获

• be pushed into the police car 被推上警车

• had no time to run 来不及逃跑

三、心理描写（用于图2、图3）

增加人物真实感，是冲A类的重要得分点

紧张/害怕

• his heart was beating fast 心跳加速

• his hands were sweating 手在出汗

• he could feel his throat go dry 感到喉咙发干

• fear crept into his chest 恐惧爬上心头

邻居视角

• she knew something was wrong 她知道出事了

• her heart pounded as she picked up the phone 拿起电话时心怦怦跳

• she stayed frozen for a second 她僵了一秒

四、语言描写（用于图3，增加戏剧冲突）

让人物“开口说话”，画面感更强

邻居（报警/低声）

• “There’s a thief in the house!” “家里有小偷！”

• “I need to call the police.” “我得报警。”

• She whispered into the phone: “Please come quickly.” 她对着电话小声说：“请快来。”

小偷（慌张/求饶）——可用于图4

• “Please don’t call the police!” “别报警！”

• “I’m sorry, I won’t do it again.” “对不起，我再也不敢了。”

警察（严肃）

• “You are under arrest.” “你被捕了。”

• “Don’t move!” “不许动！”

五、主题升华（用于图4结尾）

扣题、给文章一个“灵魂”

法律与正义

• Crime never pays. 犯罪没有好下场。

• No one can break the law and get away with it. 没人能违法后逃脱。

• Justice is always watching. 正义一直在注视着。

道理与成长

• This story teaches us a lesson. 这个故事给我们一个教训。

• We should always be honest and follow the law. 我们应该诚实守法。

• One wrong step can change your life. 一步走错，一生改变。

冷静与勇敢（适用于房主型）

• Staying calm in danger is the best way to solve a problem. 危险中保持冷静是解决问题的最好方式。

考场组装

图1（环境+动作）In the dead of night, a thief slipped into a house like a shadow.

图2（动作+心理）He opened the drawers and grabbed the cash and phone. His hands were trembling slightly.

图3（动作+语言+心理）The noise woke the neighbor. Her heart pounded. She whispered into the phone: “Please come quickly.”

图4（动作+升华）The police rushed in and caught him red-handed. Crime never pays.

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