各位同学、家长好,我是梅老师。
今天讲中考英语最后一个题型——书面表达。
前面几天讲了完形填空(逻辑词定位法)、选词填空(词性判断法),今天收官——写作提分的"三件套"。
很多孩子背了一堆模板,考场一紧张全忘了,写出来的东西千篇一律:"I think it's very important. We should study hard."
这种作文,阅卷老师看100份,99份长这样。凭什么给你高分?
今天教你3个"弹药",背熟了直接用,比临场发挥稳10倍。
一、三件套是什么
第1件:比喻句(画面感)
普通写法:English is very important to me. 高级写法:English is like a bridge that connects me to the world.
为什么高级?因为"bridge"给了阅卷老师画面感。他不用猜你为什么喜欢英语,他直接"看到"了——英语是桥,连接你和世界。
5个万能比喻句(背下来):
| 1. | English is like a bridge that connects me to the world. (英语就像一座桥,连接我和世界。) |
| 2. | Books are like windows that open up a new world for me. (书就像窗户,为我打开了新世界。) |
| 3. | Sports are like a fire that lights up my life. (运动就像一团火,照亮了我的生活。) |
| 4. | Music is like a friend that always stays with me. (音乐就像一个朋友,永远陪伴我。) |
| 5. | Learning is like climbing a mountain — the higher you go, the better the view. (学习就像爬山——爬得越高,风景越好。) |
第2件:定语从句(复杂句驾驭能力)
普通写法:Our teacher uses games. It makes class interesting. 高级写法:Our teacher uses games to help us learn, which makes English my happiest hour at school.
which引导的非限制性定语从句,是中考英语写作的"加分神器"。阅卷老师看到which,就知道这个孩子语法功底扎实。
5个万能定语从句(背下来):
| 1. | ...which makes it my favorite subject. (……这使它成为我最喜欢的科目。) |
| 2. | ...which helps me a lot in my study. (……这对我的学习帮助很大。) |
| 3. | ...which I think is very important for us. (……我认为这对我们很重要。) |
| 4. | ...where I can learn a lot of new things. (……在那里我能学到很多新东西。) |
| 5. | ...who always encourages me when I'm in trouble. (……当我遇到困难时,他/她总是鼓励我。) |
第3件:连接词(逻辑清晰)
普通写法:I like English. I study it every day. It's useful. 高级写法:First, English is like a bridge. Second, our teacher makes class lively. Last but not least, learning English helps me get a better future.
连接词让文章结构清晰,阅卷老师一眼就能看出你的逻辑。
万能连接词清单:
| 用途 | 连接词 | |------|--------| | 开头 | First / First of all / To begin with | | 递进 | Second / What's more / In addition / Moreover | | 转折 | However / But / On the other hand | | 总结 | All in all / In conclusion / In a word | | 举例 | For example / Such as / Like |
二、三件套组合公式
万能结构(3段式):
第1段:开头(2-3句) - 打招呼 + 点题 - I'm happy to tell you about... - There are three reasons why I like...
第2段:主体(4-6句) - 三件套全上:比喻句 + 定语从句 + 连接词 - First, ... Second, ... Last but not least, ...
第3段:结尾(2-3句) - 总结 + 邀请互动 - All in all, ... What's your favorite...? I'm looking forward to your reply.
三、3个常见丢分原因
原因1:没细节
❌ I like English because it's useful. ✅ English is like a bridge that connects me to the world. I can read stories from different countries and make friends with people all over the world.
记住:说"有用"不如说"怎么有用"。给具体例子,给画面感。
原因2:没亮点句型
❌ Our teacher is very good. She teaches us well. ✅ Our teacher uses games and songs to help us learn, which makes English my happiest hour at school.
记住:一篇作文至少要有1个定语从句+1个比喻句,这是拿高分的"门槛"。
原因3:格式不对
邮件/书信的格式: ``` Dear Chris,
正文...
Yours, Li Hua ```
注意: - Dear后面跟名字,不是Dear friend - 结尾用Yours(熟人)或Yours sincerely(不太熟) - 别忘了落款(Li Hua)
四、最后58天练习建议
每周写2篇作文: 1. 选一个中考常考话题(学校生活/爱好/建议/邀请) 2. 用"三件套"公式写一篇 3. 找老师批改,重点看亮点句型有没有用对
背诵计划: - 本周:背5个比喻句 - 下周:背5个定语从句 - 第3周:背连接词表 - 第4周:组合练习,写3篇完整作文
一句话总结
作文不是"写够字数就行",而是"有没有让阅卷老师眼前一亮的句子"。
比喻句给画面,定语从句给深度,连接词给结构。三件套齐了,高分就来了。
我是梅老师,20年英语教学,专治"背了模板还是写不好作文"。觉得有用就收藏转发吧!
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