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题目：
The bar graph below shows the number of non-medical employees in a hospital across different departments between 2000 and 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
下图展示了 2000 年至 2015 年间，一家医院不同科室的非医疗人员数量。选取并阐述主要信息，必要时进行对比分析。
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The bar chart contrasts the number of non-medical staff employed in five departments at a UK clinic from the year 2000 to 2015 in 5 year intervals.
Overall, the number of administrative staff expanded dramatically and remained the largest group throughout the period; likewise, the number of IT personnel also grew substantially, whereas the figure for cleaners declined steadily while maintenance workers and security guards changed relatively little over the fifteen years.
In the year 2000, administrative staff numbered about 45, considerably higher than cleaners at roughly 30 and maintenance workers at around 20. Over the following decade, administrative employment increased steadily to about 60 in 2005 and then rose sharply to approximately 85 by 2010. By contrast, during the same years, the number of cleaners slipped from 30 to about 25 before dropping further to roughly 15.
Unlike the employment level of cleaners, IT support staff increased substantially from just 5 employees in 2000 to around 15 in 2005 and subsequently more than doubled to roughly 35 by 2010. Conversely, maintenance staff fluctuated slightly around the 20-worker mark throughout the period, while security guards remained broadly stable at approximately 10 employees. By 2015, IT support had climbed further to about 55 staff members, whereas maintenance and security figures changed only marginally, standing at roughly 18 and 9 respectively.
该柱状图对比了 2000 年至 2015 年间，英国一家诊所五个科室的非医疗人员数量，统计间隔为 5 年。
总体而言，行政人员的数量大幅增长，且在整个时间段内始终是人数最多的群体；同样，信息技术人员的数量也显著增加，而保洁人员的数量稳步下降，维修人员和安保人员的数量在这 15 年间则变化相对较小。
2000 年，行政人员约有 45 人，远高于保洁人员的约 30 人和维修人员的约 20 人。在接下来的十年里，行政岗位的雇佣人数稳步增长，2005 年达到约 60 人，随后大幅攀升，2010 年增至约 85 人。相比之下，在同一时期，保洁人员的数量从 30 人降至约 25 人，之后进一步跌至约 15 人。
与保洁人员的雇佣数量趋势不同，信息技术支持人员的数量大幅增长，2000 年仅 5 人，2005 年增至约 15 人，到 2010 年更是翻倍以上，达到约 35 人。相反，维修人员的数量在整个时间段内始终在 20 人左右小幅波动，安保人员的数量则基本稳定在约 10 人。到 2015 年，信息技术支持人员的数量进一步增至约 55 人，而维修人员和安保人员的数量仅略有变化，分别约为 18 人和 9 人。
- Essay Analysis 范文解析 -
Standard Phrases 雅思小作文标准句式
The bar chart contrasts 该柱状图对比了
the number of …… 的数量
from the year ____ to ____ 从____年到____年
in ____ year intervals 以____年为间隔
Overall, 总体而言
expanded dramatically 大幅增长
remained 保持；依然是
throughout the period 在整个时间段内
grew 增长
the figure for …… 的数值
declined steadily 稳步下降
changed 变化
over the ____ years (period) 在____年（期间）内
numbered 总计有；数量为
Over the following decade 在接下来的十年里
increased steadily 稳步增长
rose sharply 大幅攀升
slipped 小幅下降
dropping 下降
increased substantially 大幅增加
doubled 翻倍
fluctuated slightly 小幅波动
mark 数值；水平
broadly stable 基本稳定
climbed further to about 进一步增至约
respectively 分别
Vocabulary 高分词汇
intervals 间隔
expanded 增长；扩张
personnel 人员；员工
substantially 显著地；大幅度地
relatively 相对地
employment 雇佣；就业
employment level 雇佣数量；就业水平
employees 雇员；员工
mark 水平；数值
members 人员；成员
marginally 轻微地；微小地
respectively 分别
Cohesion & Cohesion (C&C) words and phrases 连贯衔接词汇/短语
in 在…… 内
at 达到（具体数值）
Overall, 总体而言
dramatically 大幅地
and 并且
the largest 最多的
throughout 整个；自始至终
; likewise, 同样地
also 也
substantially, 显著地
, whereas 而；然而
steadily 稳步地
while 同时
relatively little 相对较少
about 大约
, considerably higher than 远高于
roughly 大约
around 大约
Over the following decade 在接下来的十年里
steadily 稳步地
and then 随后
approximately 大约
by 到…… 时（为止）
By contrast, 相比之下
, during the same years, 在同一时期
before 在…… 之前
further 进一步地
Unlike 与…… 不同
substantially 大幅地
just 仅仅；只有
and subsequently 随后
more than 超过
Conversely, 相反地
slightly 轻微地
, while 同时
broadly 大体上；基本上
only marginally 仅轻微地
, standing at 数值为；达到
respectively 分别
-- Score Summary --
Task Achievement (TA): 9 分
Fully addresses the task with a clear description of the chart and a precise overview.
完整回应题目要求，清晰描述图表内容，且概述精准到位。
The overview accurately identifies the dominant trends.
概述部分准确提炼出主要发展趋势。
Key features are carefully selected and compared rather than mechanically listed.
精心选取核心信息并进行对比分析，而非机械罗列数据。
Data is used accurately and appropriately to support comparisons.
准确、恰当地运用数据支撑对比分析。
Coherence and Cohesion (C&C): 9 分
Information is logically organised into clear paragraphs with a strong progression of ideas.
信息逻辑清晰，段落划分明确，观点推进衔接自然。
Effectively groups related categories (administrative vs cleaners; IT vs smaller departments) to create meaningful comparisons.
将相关类别有效分组（行政人员与保洁人员；信息技术人员与人数较少的科室人员），进行有意义的对比。
Cohesive devices are varied and natural (“By contrast,” “Conversely,” “Unlike…”), and referencing is smooth throughout.
衔接手段丰富且自然（“相比之下”“相反地”“与…… 不同” 等），全文指代用法流畅。
Sentences connect logically, creating a fluent analytical flow rather than a mechanical reporting style.
句子间逻辑衔接紧密，行文分析流畅，而非机械的流水账式叙述。
Lexical Resource (LR): 9 分
A wide and precise range of reporting vocabulary is used appropriately: “expanded dramatically,” “fluctuated slightly,” “remained broadly stable,” “more than doubled.”
恰当使用丰富且精准的图表描述词汇。
Word choice is accurate and natural for academic Task 1 reporting.
词汇选择准确、自然，符合学术类小作文的写作要求。
Lexical variation is well controlled with no repetition or awkward phrasing.
词汇变换运用得当，无重复表达或生硬句式。
Grammatical Range & Accuracy (GRA): 9 分
A wide variety of complex and compound-complex sentences is used effectively.
有效运用多种复合句和并列复合句结构。
Grammar is controlled throughout with accurate tense usage and clear clause relationships.
全文语法运用娴熟，时态使用准确，从句逻辑关系清晰。
Punctuation is handled well, including appropriate use of the semicolon.
标点符号使用规范，分号的使用尤为恰当。
No noticeable grammatical errors that would impede clarity.
无明显语法错误，不影响表达的清晰度。
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