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Shopping changed dramatically in the last few years.

时态使用不够恰当。

这里的in the last few years 通常表示从过去延续到现在的一段时间，强调这段时间内发生的变化，因此通常使用现在完成时。

shopping 指购物这一活动，而文章实际上主要讨论的是购物方式的变化。

The way people shop has changed dramatically.

In the past, people bought things in stores and payed with cash.

payed 拼写错误。

动词pay 的过去式和过去分词通常是 paid，而不是 payed。

In the past, people shoppedin stores and paid in cash.

Transportation also changed a lot.

文章讨论的是从过去到现在的变化，因此这里使用现在完成时更加合适。

changed a lot 比较笼统。change强调发生了变化，变化可以是好是坏；improve强调有所改善、变得更好。

Transportation has also improved greatly.

A few years ago, people took buses and board trains that are slow.

时态不一致。A few years ago 指过去，因此应该使用一般过去时。

A few years ago, people often traveled by bus or ordinary train, which were relatively slow.

What's more, our communication methods changed completely.

时态不准确。另外changed completely 语气过强。Completely 表示完全、彻底地。过去人们写信，现在人们主要通过网络聊天，这确实是很大的变化，但并不意味着传统的通信方式已经完全消失。

What's more, the way we communicate has changed greatly.

Last but not least, we developed more ways to entertain.

时态不准确。Entertain 作动词时，通常需要明确娱乐谁或使谁开心。例如：entertain guests：招待客人；entertain ourselves：自娱自乐。

We now have more ways to entertain ourselves.

Now, we play video games or just scroll on your mobile phone.

人称代词不一致。前半句的主语是we，后面却使用了 your。应该统一人称。

Now, we play video games or scroll through social media/ browse our phones.

With the development of society, amazing changes have taken place in our lives.

Shopping has changed greatly in recent years. In the past, people usually shopped in stores and paid in cash. Today, many people prefer shopping online. Transportation has also improved. In the past, long-distance journeys often took a long time, but now high-speed trains and airplanes make traveling much faster. The way we communicate has changed, too. People used to write letters, but now they can chat online and send messages instantly. Our leisure activities have also changed. Today, many people spend their free time playing video games or using social media.

These changes have made our lives easier and more convenient. I believe our future will be even brighter.

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描述习惯变化

People used to..., but now they...

人们过去常常……，但现在他们……

描述变化结果

..., making it easier to...

……，从而使……更容易

描述……作用

Thanks to..., people can...

多亏了……，人们能够……

补充信息

What's more, ...

此外，……

强调积极影响

These changes have made...

这些变化使得……

对比过去与现在

In the past..., but now...

过去……，但现在……

总结变化的影响

These changes have made our lives easier and more convenient.

这些变化让我们的生活变得更轻松、更便利。