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教育部教育考试院在《2026年高考英语全国卷试题评析》中强调，高考英语命题坚持立德树人，通过精心设计语篇和情境，“涵养人文底蕴，塑造道德品格”，引导学生养成“积极向上的道德品格与生活习惯”。试题注重“创设真实、多元、富有启发性的语言运用情境”，考查学生在具体情境中“恰当、灵活地运用英语分析问题、解决问题的能力”。
读后续写，正是这一理念最直接的体现。它要求学生在读懂原文的基础上，顺着人物性格与情感逻辑，用与原文风格一致的语言完成故事的“最后一公里”。真正的高分续写，不是华丽辞藻的堆砌，而是对原文伏笔的精准回收、对人物行为的合理延续、对主题内涵的真诚表达。
今天，2026年10月8日，距离2027年1月浙江高考首考还有整整90天。90天，足以让一篇续写从“没思路”走向“高分文”，也足以让一位考生从迷茫走向从容。今天想和大家分享的这篇续写，来自浙南名校联盟高三10月联考——一个关于“激流中的生死救援”的故事。Bennett在皮划艇事故中被急流冲走，命悬一线；Tom Carter听到呼救，抓起一根绳子冲向河边。它让我们看到：英雄不是天生的，而是在别人需要时，选择不转身离去的那个人。
本文沿用“挖掘伏笔→倒推情节节点→语言迁移仿写→范文赏析”的完整思维体系，以该题为蓝本进行拆解。这并非唯一的“标准答案”，更不是新的“万能模板”，而只是笔者多年教学实践的一点心得。恳请各位同行批评指正，也希望能为备考学子打开一扇思路之窗。
让我们一起，回归续写的本真——读懂原文，顺其自然，用朴实的语言讲述真实的故事。
一、先看真题：读懂原文是续写的“地基”
请你先花3分钟认真阅读原文，边读边圈画——我们马上要像侦探一样，从字里行间“挖”出所有伏笔。
2026-2027学年第一学期浙南名校联盟高三10月联考英语续写真题原文
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was a bright, unseasonably warm Saturday in late April when 32-year-old Bennett Reinhardt and his childhood friend Mary decided to go kayaking (皮划艇) on the Elk River, a winding, fast-moving waterway that cuts through the hills of northern Alabama. The plan was simple: paddle a gentle stretch, enjoy the sunshine, and be back by mid-afternoon. Neither had any idea the day would turn into a fight for survival.
The trouble started almost immediately. The river, swollen from days of heavy rain, was running much faster than usual. Within minutes of launching, the current grabbed their kayaks and swept them downstream far quicker than they’d anticipated. Before they knew it, they’d drifted into a narrow, rocky gorge (峡谷) known locally as “The Narrows.”
Panic set in as Bennett’s kayak crashed into a rock and turned over. He hit the water hard, the cold current instantly stealing his breath. Mary, who was just ahead, managed to paddle to the bank and climb to safety, but Bennett was gone—swept downstream, bouncing off rocks, his body rolling in the icy water.
Some 200 yards downstream, Bennett finally managed to grab onto a small tree growing out of the riverbank. The tree he clung to was small, its roots barely holding in the soft soil. Each surge of current pulled at his body, threatening to tear him loose. Bennett’s hands were numb, his muscles shaking from hypothermia (失温), his mind foggy from the shock. He clung there, gasping, as the water raged past. He shouted for help, but the roaring current drowned most of his voice. His strength was fading fast, and he knew he couldn’t hold on much longer. “Please,” he whispered, “someone help me.”
Tom Carter, a construction worker who lived a half-mile from the river, was working in his yard. He had lived there his whole life and had pulled more than one careless paddler out of trouble.
所给段首句：
Paragraph 1: On hearing the frantic shouts, Tom grabbed a rope and headed toward the water.
Paragraph 2: Moments later, Mary arrived and saw Bennett lying on the muddy bank.
二、高分思维第一步：深度挖掘原文伏笔（3分钟）
像侦探一样梳理文本信息，区分核心人物、关键物品、场景、情绪、隐藏线索，所有伏笔都需要在续写中一一呼应，这是情节合理、紧扣原文的基础。
1. 核心名词梳理
名词 | 信息解读与续写要求 |
Bennett | 主人公，32岁，皮划艇事故中落水，体力濒临极限，是救援对象 |
Mary | Bennett的朋友，成功上岸，第二段出现，是情感纽带 |
Tom Carter | 救援者，住在河边，有救援经验，第一段核心人物 |
Elk River / The Narrows | 急流峡谷，事故地点，环境描写需体现水流湍急 |
rope | 核心救援工具，第一段段首关键词，必须贯穿救援过程 |
small tree | Bennett抓住的救命树，根部不牢，体现危险程度 |
hypothermia / numb hands | 身体状况，体现时间紧迫，救援刻不容缓 |
muddy bank | 第二段场景，救援成功后的落脚点 |
思维训练：续写中必须回应的伏笔——Tom如何用绳子救人？Bennett如何被拉上岸？Mary到达后看到什么？三人的情感如何交织？救援成功后有什么感悟？
2. 核心动词与情感梳理
动作/情绪短语 | 内涵解读 |
swept downstream / bouncing off rocks | 急流威力，体现危险 |
clung to / roots barely holding | 命悬一线，时间紧迫 |
hands numb / muscles shaking / mind foggy | 身体极限，救援必须迅速 |
whispered, “someone help me” | 绝望中的最后呼救 |
had pulled more than one paddler out of trouble | 伏笔：Tom有救援经验，为续写提供依据 |
grabbed a rope and headed toward the water | 段首句已给，行动果断 |
思维训练：原文结尾Bennett“力气快耗尽”，Tom“抓起绳子冲向河边”。续写第一段要写Tom如何利用绳子救人，过程要有紧张感和画面感。第二段要写Mary到达后的场景，以及三人的情感交流和主题升华。
3. 隐含信息梳理
① “Tom had lived there his whole life”：熟悉地形和水流，知道从哪里下水最安全。
② “had pulled more than one careless paddler out of trouble”：有救援经验，动作熟练。
③ “Mary managed to paddle to the bank”：Mary安全但无助，第二段她的出现是情感高潮。
④ “hypothermia / strength fading”：Bennett坚持不了太久，救援必须分秒必争。
⑤ “the river was swollen from days of heavy rain”：水流比平时更急，救援难度更大。
小结：读懂原文不是“看懂故事”，而是看出所有必须回应的钩子。列出清单后，情节自然浮现。
三、高分思维第二步：从段首句倒推“两段必写内容”（5分钟）
第一段首句分析：On hearing the frantic shouts, Tom grabbed a rope and headed toward the water.
问自己三个问题：
1．Tom如何接近Bennett？→ 沿着河岸跑，找到合适位置，把绳子扔给Bennett。
2．救援过程如何？→ Bennett抓住绳子，Tom用力拉，但水流太急，过程艰难。
3．最终如何成功？→ Tom一点一点把Bennett拉向岸边，最终拖上泥泞的河岸。
第一段情节链条（5个节点）：
1．Tom听到呼救，抓起绳子冲向河边。
2．Tom发现Bennett紧紧抓住小树，脸色发青，体力不支。
3．Tom把绳子一端系在树上，另一端扔给Bennett。
4．Bennett抓住绳子，Tom用力拉，水流冲击，过程艰难。
5．Tom终于把Bennett拖上泥泞的河岸，Bennett瘫倒在地，咳嗽吐水。
第二段首句分析：Moments later, Mary arrived and saw Bennett lying on the muddy bank.
问自己三个问题：
1．Mary看到什么？→ Bennett躺在泥地上，浑身湿透，发抖，但还活着。
2．Mary的反应是什么？→ 冲过去，流泪，抱住Bennett，感谢Tom。
3．最终感悟是什么？→ 危难中的善意与勇气，陌生人之间的温暖。
第二段情节链条（4个节点）：
1．Mary赶到，看到Bennett躺在泥地上，冲过去跪在他身边。
2．Mary流泪拥抱Bennett，Bennett微弱地微笑，说“多亏了Tom”。
3．Tom帮Bennett裹上外套，带他们回附近的家，提供热饮并打电话求助。
4．主题升华：Bennett默默许下承诺——将来若有机会，也要像Tom一样帮助别人。
四、高分思维第三步：语言迁移——怎样写得“像原文”？
语言迁移不是抄袭，而是模仿原文的“味道”——原文用什么词，你就用什么层级的词；原文用什么句式，你就用什么句式。
1. 先看原文的“语言指纹”
原文句子 | 特点 |
a winding, fast-moving waterway | 简单形容词，直接描写环境 |
the current grabbed their kayaks and swept them downstream | 拟人化动词，体现水流威力 |
his hands were numb, his muscles shaking | 身体细节，体现极限状态 |
he clung there, gasping | 动作+状态，画面感强 |
strength was fading fast | 简洁有力，时间紧迫 |
“Please,” he whispered, “someone help me.” | 直接引语，绝望呼救 |
had pulled more than one careless paddler out of trouble | 伏笔句，为救援提供依据 |
结论：原文是简单环境描写、动作细节、身体状态刻画、直接引语的风格。续写必须保持。
2. 参考范文如何做到“如出一辙”？
关键迁移原则：
① 复用原文动作链：原文“grabbed onto a small tree” → 范文“grabbed the rope with both hands”。
② 复用原文身体状态词：原文“hands numb / muscles shaking” → 范文“body trembling”。
③ 复用原文环境描写：原文“icy water / muddy bank” → 范文“muddy shore”。
④ 复用直接引语：原文“someone help me” → 范文“Grab it!” / “Thanks to him.”
⑤ 保持情感递进：原文从危险→绝望，范文从紧张→获救→感恩。
3. 低分写法 vs 高分迁移写法对比
学生常见低分表达 | 问题分析 | 高分迁移写法（贴合原文风格） |
Tom saved Bennett. | 表达干瘪，无细节 | Tom braced himself and pulled with all his might, inch by inch, until he seized Bennett’s shoulders. |
Bennett was very cold. | 表达空洞 | His face was blue with cold, his whole body trembling. |
Mary was happy. | 表达苍白 | She rushed to his side and knelt beside him, her eyes filled with tears. |
思维核心：不是“翻译中文想法”，而是用原文中出现过的句式、词汇、节奏去表达。
五、命题组参考范文赏析：用实战证明策略的有效性
下面呈现的是本次考试命题组提供的参考范文。
Paragraph 1:On hearing the frantic shouts, Tom grabbed a rope and headed toward the water. Reaching the bank, he spotted Bennett clinging to the small tree, his face blue with cold. The bank was steep and slippery, and the current was far too strong to swim against. Tom quickly tied one end of the rope to a sturdy tree and threw the other end toward Bennett. “Grab it!” he yelled. Bennett lunged forward and caught the rope with both hands. Tom braced himself and pulled with all his might, inch by inch, until he seized Bennett’s shoulders and dragged him onto the muddy shore. Bennett collapsed, coughing up water, his whole body trembling.（98 words）
Paragraph 2:Moments later, Mary arrived and saw Bennett lying on the muddy bank. She rushed to his side and knelt beside him, her eyes filled with tears. “I thought I’d lost you,” she sobbed. Bennett managed a weak smile and squeezed her hand. “Thanks to him,” he whispered, nodding toward Tom, who was already wrapping his jacket around Bennett’s shaking shoulders. Tom helped them back to his house nearby, where he made hot drinks and called for help. Sitting by the fire, Bennett stared at the stranger who had saved his life and made a silent promise: if ever given the chance, he would do the same for someone else.（97 words）
命题组参考范文与原文“如出一辙”对照分析
原文特征 | 范文对应 | 迁移类型 |
clung to the small tree | clinging to the small tree | 动作直接复用 |
hands numb / muscles shaking | face blue with cold / whole body trembling | 身体状态迁移 |
the current was running much faster | the current was far too strong to swim against | 环境描写呼应 |
whispered, “someone help me” | “Grab it!” he yelled | 直接引语迁移 |
had pulled more than one paddler out of trouble | Tom braced himself and pulled with all his might | 救援经验体现 |
muddy bank | muddy shore | 场景复现 |
strength was fading fast | Bennett collapsed, coughing up water | 体力极限的呼应 |
验证结果：命题组提供的参考范文做到了伏笔全回收、语言像原文、情感真且深。它没有华丽炫技，只是用朴实而有力的语言，完成了一个让人信服的救援故事。
六、完整实战演练：从零到一写出一类文
现在，我们模拟考场，用上面三步法写一篇与命题组参考参考范文情节不同、但同样符合高分标准的续写。
第一步：列出伏笔清单（脑中过一遍）
Bennett抓住小树、体力不支、Tom有救援经验、绳子、急流、Mary安全上岸、泥泞河岸。
第二步：确定两段情节节点
第一段：Tom冲向河边→发现Bennett→系绳扔绳→Bennett抓住→艰难拉拽→成功上岸。
第二段：Mary赶到→跪地流泪→Bennett微笑感谢→Tom带他们回家→主题升华。
第三步：逐句迁移写作（边写边想原文）
第一段：On hearing the frantic shouts, Tom grabbed a rope and headed toward the water.首句已给，接着写：
1．He ran along the bank until he spotted Bennett, still clinging to the tiny tree. （呼应“clung to the small tree”）
2．The water was rushing so fast that it nearly pulled Bennett under. （呼应“current was running much faster”）
3．Tom tied the rope to a tree and threw it toward Bennett. “Catch!” he shouted. （呼应“grabbed a rope”）
4．Bennett reached out with numb hands and caught it. （呼应“hands were numb”）
5．Tom pulled with all his strength, inch by inch, until Bennett was close enough to grab. （动作链，体现艰难）
6．Finally, he dragged Bennett onto the muddy bank. （呼应“muddy bank”）
第二段：Moments later, Mary arrived and saw Bennett lying on the muddy bank.首句已给，接着写：
1．She ran to him and fell to her knees, tears streaming down her face. （呼应“Mary arrived”）
2．“I thought you were gone,” she cried. （直接引语，情感爆发）
3．Bennett smiled weakly. “He saved me,” he whispered, pointing to Tom. （呼应“Thanks to him”）
4．Tom wrapped his jacket around Bennett and helped him to his house. （呼应“wrapping his jacket”）
5．Sitting by the fire, Bennett looked at Tom and made a silent promise: he would never walk past someone in need. （主题升华）
最后，连句成文，修改完善。
第二篇参考范文完整版
Paragraph 1:On hearing the frantic shouts, Tom grabbed a rope and headed toward the water.He ran along the bank until he spotted Bennett still clinging to the tiny tree, his face blue with cold, his body shaking violently. The water was rushing so fast that it nearly pulled Bennett under with every surge. Tom tied one end of the rope to a sturdy tree and threw the other end toward Bennett. “Catch it!” he shouted over the roar of the river. Bennett reached out with numb hands and caught it. Tom braced his feet against a rock and pulled with all his strength, inch by inch, until he could seize Bennett’s shoulders and drag him onto the muddy bank.（105 words）
Paragraph 2:Moments later, Mary arrived and saw Bennett lying on the muddy bank.She ran to him and fell to her knees, tears streaming down her face. “I thought you were gone,” she cried, her voice shaking. Bennett smiled weakly and squeezed her hand. “He saved me,” he whispered, pointing to Tom. Tom wrapped his jacket around Bennett’s shaking shoulders and helped them both back to his house nearby. Sitting by the fire with a warm drink in his hands, Bennett looked at the stranger who had saved his life and made a silent promise: if ever given the chance, he would do the same for someone else.（95 words）
【第二篇范文与参考范文的差异化分析】
维度 | 参考范文 | 第二篇范文 | 差异说明 |
救援动作 | tied one end...threw the other end | tied one end of the rope to a sturdy tree and threw the other end | 第二篇更具体，增加“sturdy”体现选点稳妥 |
拉拽描写 | braced himself and pulled with all his might, inch by inch | braced his feet against a rock and pulled with all his strength, inch by inch | 第二篇增加“against a rock”，画面感更强 |
身体状态 | his face blue with cold | his face blue with cold, his body shaking violently | 第二篇增加“shaking violently”，强化寒冷与危险 |
环境描写 | the current was far too strong to swim against | the water was rushing so fast that it nearly pulled Bennett under with every surge | 第二篇用“with every surge”体现持续威胁 |
对话设计 | “Grab it!” he yelled | “Catch it!” he shouted over the roar of the river | 第二篇增加“over the roar”，体现环境嘈杂 |
Mary反应 | rushed to his side and knelt beside him | ran to him and fell to her knees, tears streaming down her face | 第二篇更具体，情感更饱满 |
感恩表达 | “Thanks to him,” he whispered | “He saved me,” he whispered, pointing to Tom | 第二篇更直接，动作更明确 |
结尾升华 | if ever given the chance, he would do the same for someone else | if ever given the chance, he would do the same for someone else | 两篇一致，善意传递主题 |
总词数 | 195词 | 200词 | 第二篇稍长点 |
验证结果：两篇范文情节不同、细节不同，但都做到了伏笔全回收、语言像原文、情感真且深，且篇幅相当，均属21+高分佳作。
七、考场冲刺21+的五个实操习惯
1．圈画伏笔：3分钟内圈出人物、场景、物品、情绪四类线索。
2．规划节点：动笔前列出每段3-4个情节节点。
3．语言仿写：每写一句话，对照原文句式，优先使用原文出现过的短语。
4．篇幅把控：两段合计控制在170-230词（不含段首句）。
5．收尾检查：伏笔是否全部呼应、词汇是否超纲、时态是否统一、主题是否积极。
结尾语：愿每一份勇气，都能被真诚地记录
写到这里，笔者想起这篇续写中的Tom Carter。他不是超级英雄，只是一个住在河边的普通建筑工人。但当他听到呼救声，他没有犹豫，抓起绳子就冲向河边。那根绳子，一头系在树上，一头递给了一个陌生人——也递出了人性中最朴素、最珍贵的善意。
Bennett在获救后许下承诺：将来若有机会，也要像Tom一样帮助别人。这就是善意的传递——它不需要豪言壮语，只需要在别人需要时，选择不转身离去。
今天，距离2027年1月浙江高考首考还有90天。90天，足以让一篇续写从“没思路”走向“高分文”，也足以让一位考生从迷茫走向从容。愿每一位高三学子，在这最后的90天里，不急不躁，稳扎稳打。
愿你们在考场上，像Tom一样果断，像Bennett一样坚持，像每一个认真读懂原文、顺着情感逻辑写下去的学生一样，用真实的笔触，写出属于自己的高分故事。
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