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Some people decide to go to college or university. Others, however, choose to go straight to work as they think it is important to satisfy the needs of the society and the country.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
(2026-3-14 大陆)
替换表达
substitutions
some people: high school students / graduates, school-leavers
decide: choose to do, choice, make a decision, make a resolution to do
go to college or university: attend college, enrol in university, go on to higher education, tertiary education
however: while / whereas, although
choose to go straight to work: apply for a job immediately, start a career directly
as: because, since, considering that, given that, granted that
it is important to: of paramount / prime / primary importance, give priority to


主体段练习

橙色=逻辑连接
蓝色=话题关键词
Body paragraph
支持观点2
Others, however, choose to go straight to work as they think it is important to satisfy the needs of the society and the country.
Topic sentence - 提出论点
(话题关键词,逻辑连接词,给出倾向)
那些将满足社会需求的责任置于首位的人,可能会在高中毕业后直接求职工作。
People who would prioritize responsibility for fulfilling social demands may apply for a job directly after graduating from high school.
Background - 背景句
(观点在什么环境条件下更有说服力?)
这种做法在面临人口老龄化、经济衰退和劳动力短缺的国家尤为普遍。
Particularly prevalent is this practice among countries grappling with an aging population, economic recession and labour shortages.
Explanation - 论述
(分析高中毕业生进入职场工作对社会的好处)
If + 原因,主句是结果
如果高中毕业生一毕业就开启职业生涯,他们将创造利润并立即为社会作出贡献,因为他们所具备的基础知识和技能足以满足大多数职位的最低要求,例如快递员、销售员和服务员。
If high school graduates start their careers once they leave school, they will generate profits and make an immediate contribution to society, since they are equipped with fundamental knowledge and skills that are adequate to meet the minimum requirements of most positions, such as delivery workers, salespeople and waiters.
Example - 举例
(以具体的国家为例,回应题目的关键词satisfy the needs of the society and the country)
以日本为例,该国劳动力老龄化所带来的问题明显且严重,高中毕业生经常在零售业与酒店业中担任关键角色,维持这些行业的运转。
For instance, in Japan, where the problems caused by an aging workforce are obvious and severe, high school graduates often fill critical roles in retail and hospitality, keeping these industries afloat.
Explanation - 论述
(进一步深入展开观点:突出高中毕业生工作的独特优势)
此外,如果这些年轻劳动者进入劳动力市场并在职场中积极表现,他们会为该地区注入活力,因为他们比年长员工更具适应能力,学习速度也更快。
Furthermore, if these young workers enter the labour market and perform actively in the workplace, they may also inject vitality into the region as they are more adaptable and quicker to learn than elderly workers.
Example - 举例
(注意举例与前文观点相匹配,以增强观点的说服力)
一个典型例证是,他们能够利用尖端技术(尤其是人工智能)来应对复杂情况,如分析消费者偏好、优化供应链以及实现常规任务的自动化。
A case in point is their ability to take advantage of cutting-edge technology, especially artificial intelligence, to navigate complex situations, such as analyzing consumer preferences, optimizing supply chains and automating routine tasks.

Body paragraph
支持观点2
Others, however, choose to go straight to work as they think it is important to satisfy the needs of the society and the country.
People who would prioritize responsibility for fulfilling social demands may apply for a job directly after graduating from high school. Particularly prevalent is this practice among countries grappling with an aging population, economic recession and labour shortages. If high school graduates start their careers once they leave school, they will generate profits and make an immediate contribution to society, since they are equipped with fundamental knowledge and skills that are adequate to meet the minimum requirements of most positions, such as delivery workers, salespeople and waiters. For instance, in Japan, where the problems caused by an aging workforce are obvious and severe, high school graduates often fill critical roles in retail and hospitality, keeping these industries afloat. Furthermore, if these young workers enter the labour market and perform actively in the workplace, they may also inject vitality into the region as they are more adaptable and quicker to learn than elderly workers. A case in point is their ability to take advantage of cutting-edge technology, especially artificial intelligence, to navigate complex situations, such as analyzing consumer preferences, optimizing supply chains and automating routine tasks.

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