2025年浙江中考英语应用文分析
假如你是张华，你正在参与校报主题为“A Good Way to Relax”的征稿活动。
请根据以下相关信息，结合自身体验，选择或自定放松方式，完成一篇稿件。
注意：（1）提供的信息仅供参考使用；
（2）文中不得出现真实姓名、学校等信息；
（3）词数80左右。
A Good Way to Relax
【命题立意】
考查学生围绕相关主题，用所学语言表达个人观点的能力以及分析问题和解决问题的能力。
【试题分析】
书面表达试题设计聚焦学生生活和学习，涉及体育、音乐、爱好、休闲、劳动教育、友情等多个话题以及介绍、喜欢、优先选择、目的等书面表达技能的考查，充分体现开放性、整合性和个性化的素养导向命题特点。
试题通过校报主题为“A Good Way to Relax”的征稿活动,借助Ways to Relax 话题支架和 A Good Way to Relax 内容支架和语言支架,要求学生结合自身经历,选择或自定放松方式完成稿件。试题要求看似是介绍放松方式，但学生不能轻易落笔，其中文章首句的选择、内容和语言的合理性及逻辑性等是需要注意的方面。总体上该试题贴近学生真实生活，每个学生都有自己独特的放松方式，如听音乐、看电影、做运动、与朋友或父母交流等，每个学生都有机会结合自身经历和感受，作出有话可说的恰当选择。试题体现新课标背景下对学生核心素养的考查，将英语真正融入学生生活，有利于学生积极主动将所学语言运用于解决实际问题，体现了应用性、开放性和独特性。
本题的写作要领及注意事项如下:
（1）审题清晰，明确写作要点
在开始写作前，先要仔细审题，明确写作要点。本文的写作要求为围绕校报主题“A Good Way to Relax”的征稿活动,参考提供的 Ways to Relax 话题支架和 A Good Way to Relax 内容支架和语言支架,结合自身生活体验和语言知识积淀，选择或自定放松方式完成稿件。
一些学生审题不清，表现为:①对所有放松方式进行了简单介绍，缺少与真实生活的关联，导致写作内容比较笼统;② 写作内容缺乏个性化，空话、套话过多;③ 提供的内容和语言支架缺少整合，且逻辑性不够。
（2）语言适切，关注意义表达
在写作时，要结合具体语境，运用所学语言知识进行描述、叙述和说明等。本文的写作目的是介绍自己的有效放松方式，为他人提供参考。因此在写作时，一方面需要考虑推荐的放松方式的合理性、科学性和有效性;另一方面，还需要结合自己的生活经历和相关语言知识储备，运用恰当的语言形式进行意义表达，阐述自己的态度和观点。
（3）内容融合，体现素养目标
在写作过程中，学生需要参考要点信息提示，如征稿活动主题“A Good Wayto Relax“,话题支架Ways to Relax 及内容支架和语言支架A Good Way to Relax 等，结合具体语境和相关语言知识，用合乎生活和交际思维的习惯来确定表达内容和顺序。学生可以先介绍自己的放松方式，后阐明理由。如打篮球是一种很好的放松方式，学生可以结合自己的认知体验，提供更多有效细节，比如开头可用“Playing basketball is a good way for me to relax. ”，接着整合信息，说明具体细节“I often play basketball with my friends on weekends. It helps me to relax myself and keep healthy. What’s more, I can spend time with my friends as we play. After that, we often watch movies together and have fun. We eat popcorn, talk about the characters of the story，or the film stars. ”。这些信息的表述方式不是固定的，需要学生根据经验和常识自己进行科学、合理的安排和设计。在语言上，选择简洁、合适的单词和词组与表达方式即可，通过加工和组合，有条理地表达，确保表达有逻辑性，并且得体、有效。
【参考文本】
A Good Way to Relax
In my spare time, I usually enjoy reading books to relax myself. I like reading my favorite books in the library near my home. When I read books there, time goes quickly.
Through reading, I can travel to different places and meet different people. Not only can I have a talk with the characters in the books, but I can also open my eyes and enrich my knowledge. Most importantly, I often get a strong sense of satisfaction from the books.（81 words）
A Good Way to Relax
Playing basketball is a good way for me to relax. I often play basketball with my friends on weekends. It helps me to relax myself and keep healthy. What’s more, I can spend time with my friends as we play. After that, we often watch movies together and have fun. We eat popcorn, and talk about the characters of the story，or the film stars. It is not only a good way to relax ourselves, but also helps to open our eyes.（82 words）
【优秀作文示例】
例1 A Good Way to Relax
Everyone may feel tired after a long time working. To deal with stress, both doing sports and reading books are useful. However, as for me, listening to light music is the best method.
I usually listen to light music alone in my bedroom. After school, I lie on the bed, enjoying the peaceful atmosphere that the music brings to me. In my mind, not only does it create a world filled with fascinating landscapes, but it also takes my bad memories away. Because of it, my pressure fades away gradually.
In brief, great relaxation may give us both physical and mental health. Just shut off your brain, and enjoy your own time, everything will be better after relaxing.
例2 A Good Way to Relax
Different people have different ways to relax. As for me, reading books is a good way to relax.
In my free time, I usually read books with my sister at home, following the heroes of the stories and enjoying the charming words. By reading different kinds of books, I’m able to travel around the world without leaving home. Delighted and excited, I enjoy myself reading, completely forgetting the pressure of studying.
In my opinion, reading is definitely a brilliant way to relax. Not only does it bring me pleasure, but it also broadens my horizons.
例3A Good Way to Relax
There is no doubt that relaxing is of great importance to our health. And for me, I think reading books is a good way to relax.
Reading books is always my first choice to relax. I usually read on weekends, especially on Sunday morning. Besides, I like to read alone in the library. It not only opens my eyes, but also helps me to relax myself at the same time. Every time when I open a new book, I’m going on a different journey with the characters.
All in all，reading books always brings me happiness and knowledge. It is truly a great way to relax，isn't it？
例4 A Good Way to Relax
There are many ways to relax，such as reading books and watching movies. As for me, doing sports is the best choice.
Among all the sports, volleyball is my favorite. I often play volleyball in the gym on Saturdays with my friends who like the sport as well. Playing volleyball is a good way to relax and it can help me keep healthy at the same time. Besides, it gives me the chance to make more friends and improve my ability to communicate with others. In addition, it makes me know the importance of teamwork and practice more deeply.
In a word, doing sports really makes a big difference to my life. It helps me relax, and more importantly, it helps me have a better understanding of the world.
例5 A Good Way to Relax
Relaxing is truly necessary after studying or working hard. And the ways to relax are important，too.
For me, the best way to relax is to go hiking with friends who have the same hobby. We usually go hiking in the morning every Sunday. At 7 o'clock, we gather in the community park and then set off. We always walk across the field and climb some hills. We completely get relaxed when we see the beautiful view around us.
By going hiking, I not only build up a strong body, but also get closer to nature. When I smell the fresh air, I’m totally relaxed. What’s more, going hiking with friends makes me know the importance of friendship. We talk about some funny jokes, and have fun with each other.
All in all, going hiking is my way to relax and I'll keep going hiking.
[优秀作文评析]
首先,要点明确。学生能结合自身的生活体验,介绍一种行之有效的放松方式,如上述文中提及的听音乐、看书、打排球、徒步等都是有效的放松方式。如何介绍呢?一方面,学生可以参考写作内容提示,如例1和例2,学生根据提示内容,结合自己的生活体验,介绍where、with whom、when、why 等方面的要点信息;另一方面,学生也可以结合自己的写作构思,不局限于内容提示,如例5,重点介绍 why,凸显 hiking 带来的益处。
其次,内容融合。学生能够考虑放松方式的合理性、科学性与有效性,并依照符合生活实际和交际思维的习惯,来确定表达的内容与顺序。上述5篇优秀作文介绍的放松方式都是符合学生真实生活且科学有效的。
再者,语言适切。学生能结合自己的生活经历和相关语言知识储备,运用恰当的语言形式进行意义表达,阐述自己的态度和观点。如介绍自己独特有效的放松方式时,不同的学生会结合上下文,选择不同的语言表达,
如: However, as for me, listening to light music is the best method.
For me, the best way to relax is to go hiking with friends who have the same hobby.
Among all the sports, volleyball is my favorite.
学生还巧用了一些副词来表达程度,如:...
I'm totally relaxed.
We completely get relaxed when we see the beautiful view around us.
In a word, doing sports really makes a big difference to my life.
All in all, reading books always brings me happiness and knowledge.
Because of it, my pressure fades away gradually.
最后,逻辑表达。写作时,学生根据经验和常识进行科学、合理的内容安排和设计。在语言上,选择了简洁、合适的单词和词组与表达方式,通过加工和组合,有条理地表达自己的思想,确保语言表达的逻辑性。如:By going hiking,I not only build up a strong body, but also get closer to nature. When I smell the fresh air, I'm totally relaxed.后一句 when 引导的从句是对前一句 but also get closer to nature 的进一步解释说明。
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