📚 中考作文加油站 · 第16期

最近离中考的日子越来越近了。
Tony明显感觉时间越来越不够用。
但正是在这样的节奏中，
一点一点积累，慢慢进步。
今天这篇修改稿，是Tony最新完成的一篇英语模考作文👇

🔍 逐句精改
🟡 原句1
First we should keep voice down and wait in line in public.
❌ 问题：
缺冠词（keep our voice down）
表达不完整
✅ 修改：
First, we should keep our voices down and wait in line in public.
首先，在公共场合我们应该降低音量并排队。

🟡 原句2
It can make us happy every day.
❌ 问题：表达太弱，与主题不匹配
✅ 修改：
This shows respect for others and makes our daily life more pleasant.
这体现了对他人的尊重，也让我们的生活更加美好。

🟡 原句3
Second, when we have lunch or dinner at the table, we shouldn't start eating until everyone is ready.
✅ 很好！（基本正确）
🌟 优化版：
Second, when we have meals, we shouldn’t start eating until everyone is ready.
其次，用餐时我们应该等所有人准备好再开始。

🟡 原句4
and point at others with chopsticks.
❌ 问题：句子不完整
✅ 修改：
We shouldn’t point at others with chopsticks, either.
我们也不应该用筷子指着别人。

🟡 原句5
There are very impolite.
❌ 问题：主语错误
✅ 修改：
These behaviors are very impolite.
这些行为是非常不礼貌的。

🟡 原句6
In the end, we should be politely for teacher and follow school rules at school.
❌ 问题：
politely → polite
for teacher → to teachers
✅ 修改：
Finally, we should be polite to teachers and follow school rules.
最后，我们应该尊重老师并遵守校规。

🟡 原句7
If we want to be a person with good manners, we must make a good habits...
❌ 问题：
a habits ❌
✅ 修改：
If we want to be people with good manners, we must develop good habits in daily life.
如果我们想成为有礼貌的人，就必须养成良好的习惯。
🟡 原句8
They can help you turn better and better.
❌ 问题：表达不自然
✅ 修改：
They can help us become better and better.
这些习惯会让我们变得越来越好。